These threads and this kind of content always pisses me off a bit. See, I want to enjoy pictures with long-written captions in the form of short stories, I REALLY do as I am a writer myself, but they're always shit. I mean they're *always* shit. Poorly written, forced dialog, childish language and even terrible formatting. Seriously? You can't even do the most basic fucking formatting for these things?
Take this one for example:
>>6514569From a quick glance I can tell it has far too many ellipses, it's one long continuous monolog and it's not formatted at all. Someone clearly made a text box but decided to leave it centered rather than set it to justified and forgot to space the edge of the box away from the edge of the picture. But the biggest problem is the content of the text itself: absolutely filled with poorly thought-out redundant exposition. It starts out alright, but the narrative flow comes to a screeching halt with the line:
"..Hm? I'm not your real mother?"
It just gets progressively worse and worse like that. Don't even get me started with how stupid the line "so it seems you came" is.
Another:
>>6514575This one is immediately painful to look at with the dark blue text on a bright background. The black outline is perfect to let it stand out on its own as white text, why make it darker? Once again the problems outline above return, the text is centered and going so close to the edge it even gets cropped at the top of the picture. It's not quite as expository as the first example but all the annoying bits are there.
Finally I'll just go over this one:
>>6514571The text looks fine, it's short and concise so being centered is fine as long as it's lined up with the respective character, but the problem here is the usage of asterisks to denote an action. This is not erp, you just don't do this. The one time you should ever do this is with actions that can't actually be typed as an onomatopoeia. Laughter and giggling most certainly can.
