>>240829>>240830>>240825What they're saying I guess is your layout isn't bad but it isn't appropriate to the content you have there.
You use layout gimmicks that look good when having an overall look inside indesign, but you forget that the person that will see it printed or on screen will only focus on small bits at a time.
Layout is supposed to be organised in a way that every of these bits are coherent (leading the eye).
If you have to look at it from afar to get that it's not incoherent, it's just to please your desginer eyes.
That said, Din is cool.
tldr: when you look at it the way normal people do, it's just weirdly spaced.