Hey, one of you guys mailed some raw scripts to me in case I could proofread, Sands did them right? Sorry it's so late, but gave them a look.
http://pastebin.com/w5qeT3pL 211-212 seems fine to me
http://pastebin.com/STwHgDfF 213-216:
>"Welcome", I guess, but I don't feel like saying it.- No quotation marks needed
>I thought you had been longing for this.I thought you've been longing for this - tense, maybe
- I try to shorten "am" verbs to save space and not over-crowd speech balloons
> Like a proper business woman.Like a proper businesswoman
- one word
>I wonder how I will react to the sex this time..I wonder how I'll react to the sex this time...
- See above. Same goes for every "am" verb.
>If I push it too hard now when she's sober she might snap.If I push it too hard now, when she's sober she might snap.
- Guessed the comma position, is it right?
>I should be able to film her with my cell phone I think,>after she agrees to be my fuck buddy.>I'm sure she will go along.I should be able to film her with my cell phone, I think.
After she agrees to be my fuck buddy, I'm sure she will go along.
- Comma position again, arranged it into sentences.
>Your clitoris is throbbing by just the slightest touch.Your clitoris is throbbing with just the slightest touch.
If the script doesn't say whether to use an exclamation point or a period, just use gut feel. Hope you can use this.
>>4088174>>4088194That's not dead. Translation for the whole tank is done, only the extras remain since they're not all scanned. Blame me alone for the delays with finishing the typesetting.
