>>25222841Think of my comments here more as guidelines. A couple of pointers will probably help you improve. Too much critique is more likely to make you want to give up.
For example, in this picture I did here
>>25168112Haven's legs are too short, and the head's a touch too big for the body.
I noticed these faults myself when I posted the picture the first time.
>>25167212This one, it's the muzzle. Too long and a little too squared, but the expression worked quite well.
Practice will help you improve. I've seen a handful of artists that started in the draw threads (Haven's creator amongst them), go from mediocre skill to very good.
Hard to believe this
>>25183403and pic related were done by the same artist.
(Both are OPHavenDesigner's)